I spend my life,
Waiting for you,
Where were you?
Hiding in the Shadows,
Waiting for me,
You walked passed me,
Not knowing where you are,
You drove past me,
Not knowing where you’re going,
You have been there all of my life,
Waiting for me,
I to hide out in the shadows,
Too scared to walk into the light,
Not knowing the life awaiting me,
Would be filled with bright light,
Step into the light,
You have no idea,
What life is waiting for you.
This was awesome. Loved every line. You never known when your perfect mate just walked past you.
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Thank you my soul mate and I lived within a quarter of a mile of each other for years and never knew xx
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You see what I mean.
There was so much beauty in what you wrote. A pleasure to read. Have a good one.
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Thank you it means a lot I find a real release in my writing and am still trying to perfect my craft but the words flow so easily.
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They flowed beautifully here. Stay inspired.
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Thank you I am so happy people like my writing my husband thinks I have a real talent for it I never thought of it this way just as a load of words running out of my hand on to the paper.
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Well, maybe this is one of those few times that hubby is right! LOL
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Let’s not tell him that though lol xx
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LOL
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Good morning. I like your poetry; it is an all-too disarming reflection of om own deep recesses. However…. to give yourself credibility you MUST review and edit your work line by line, word and comma one at a time before publishing. This recent work is loaded with grammar and spelling errors. As a writer. poet, blogger I certainly make my share of mistakes and the only way to minimize imperfections is let the work ferment and then be reviewed at least twice before pushing the button.
I’m sorry to offer a criticism but I want you to be impeccable with what you have to say. It is of value.
A friend, Fred
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Thanks Fred, it is hopefully constructive criticism. However can you explain as I found a few errors but not a lot. Feel free to correct and send to me xx
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Right then! Yes of course it is constructive criticism. I certainly appreciate any I get in my ongoing aspiration for improvement. You wouldn’t believe some of the pointers I’ve taken recently on my new video-making efforts.
Here goes:
I spend my life,… do you mean spent? Which tense are you in?
Waiting for you,
Where were you?…. do you mean are you? Which tense are you in?
Hiding in the Shadows,
Waiting for me,
You walked passed me, …I assume you really mean past me?
Not knowing where you are, … you were? Again, which tense?
You drove past me,
Not knowing where youβre going,… are you would be stronger than abbreviating. Period at end?
You have been there all of my life,
Waiting for me,
I to hide out in the shadows, …too or also instead of to.
Too scared to walk into the light,
Not knowing the life awaiting me, …suggest: that the life awaiting me would be stronger
Would be filled with bright light,
Step into the light,
You have no idea,
What life is waiting for you.
Namaste, Fred
my e-mail is svpaxboatboat@gmail.com should you want to chat outside this forum.
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Thanks Fred I will have a look and respond xx just one question was it all in the same tense?? X
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Yes, step into the LIGHT of God. He is the light of the world. Bless you. π
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Yes I am living half in and half out of it but moving further into the light hopefully day by day I find it hard to leave the dark behind completely xx
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I pray God continue to draw you nearer to Him in the mighty name of Jesus! Blessings!!!
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Thank you I will try xx
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Most welcome dear!
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Thank you xx
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You’re welcome π
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πx
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This is great, could be used to describe myself or anyone we need to find.
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Thank you x
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Always a pleasure x
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Thanks again xx
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